 Va Tech Repsonse Poem, Just how I felt
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 Apr 19 2007, 05:39 PM
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Martina Expert  Group: Members Posts: 117 Joined: 7-April 07 From: Pittsburgh, PA Member No.: 403  |
This is no way a memorial piece. Just a reaction poem. How I felt upon hearing the events of VA Tech and the following reports...
National Crisis Across the Nile, wide expanse of muddy green. Not the length, mind you, but the width. The width separates us, for I can still see you— Screaming gunshot climbs over the rooftops; chaos fills the quad. see me, waving across the Nile to you? You are waving back, mute “hellos” ricocheting across flecks of river. Sunlight drips onto us, poured from god to land here, Two desks smash into the chalkboard; windows breaking. bouncing from my eyes to yours, your eyes to mine, across the Nile, hopping over tiny wavelets: a silent connection of vague sparks. Miles northward, we watch Them, safe through the TV screen. I can see you now, just as you are, waving blithely. I can see them too, leaping from the reeds, scimitars poised at your head, heart, and back, Two desks sitting before a chalkboard; sunlight in the windows. reflecting our sunlight with their whetted edges. I am watching them rape you. Now they’ve left you for dead. I forgot my swimming shoes this Over coffee and donuts a few thoughtful words. A letter of concern: morning. Mute tears across the Nile. Thanks for raising our awareness. Your sorrow means a great deal. Sincerely, Us. |
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Apr 20 2007, 09:39 AM
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Martina Expert Group: Members Posts: 193 Joined: 4-April 07 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 294 |
That's really good. This is such a terrible tragedy that has happened. I think that your poem really reflects the way that many are feeling right now.
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Apr 20 2007, 09:41 AM
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Martina Expert Group: Members Posts: 495 Joined: 4-April 07 From: Michigan Member No.: 212 |
that is really good!!!
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Apr 20 2007, 11:05 AM
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Martina Expert Group: Members Posts: 117 Joined: 7-April 07 From: Pittsburgh, PA Member No.: 403 |
Thank you. I appreciate that. It's hard. I wish I could do something, but this is the best I got (which is kind of reflected in the peice, I guess). And it's not the type of poem that pulls at your heart strings... I wish I could capture their story in a way that will honor the victims and such, but I'll leave that task to someone better suited to it.
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Apr 20 2007, 12:34 PM
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Martina Expert Group: Members Posts: 80 Joined: 3-April 07 From: Little Town Mississippi Member No.: 50 |
I think that is a very good poem!!!!! It really seems to me that what you said is what I have to say about the shooting and everything too.Good Job
God Bless |
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Apr 20 2007, 09:34 PM
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Martina Expert Group: Members Posts: 252 Joined: 3-April 07 Member No.: 146 |
Great poem. So beautiful - You're a great writer! (IMG:style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)
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Apr 23 2007, 11:20 AM
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Martina Expert Group: Members Posts: 117 Joined: 7-April 07 From: Pittsburgh, PA Member No.: 403 |
Thanks for the kind words, all. (IMG:style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)
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Apr 23 2007, 03:48 PM
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Martina Expert Group: Members Posts: 224 Joined: 3-April 07 From: East Tennessee Member No.: 96 |
That is really quite good Ang! I love it!
I mean LOVE IT!!! (IMG:style_emoticons/default/biggrin.gif) |
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